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  My company is a manufacturing company of automotive parts,and it is called Witzenmann Ltd. Witzenmann company has a long history of 160years. And it is also global company which loated in 13countries and it has more than 20branches. Witzenmann is a someone's name who create company. To tell you in detail, we have made bellows of automotive elements. It is the flexible elements of automotive exhaust system. I'm in tere, I design; um sorry I don't have enough time kk I will continue tomorrow ..
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My company is a manufacturing company of automotive parts,and it is called Witzenmann Ltd.
= My company is a manufacturing company 
for automotive parts, and it is called Witzenmann Ltd.

Witzenmann company has a long history of 160years.
=
The Witzenmann Ltd. has a long history of 160 years.

And it is also global company which loated in 13countries and it has more than 20branches.
= And it is also 
a global company which is located in 13 countries and it has more than 20 branches.

Witzenmann is a someone's name who create company.
= Witzenmann is 
the name of the company's founder.

To tell you in detail, we have made bellows of automotive elements.
= Perfect

It is the flexible elements of automotive exhaust system.
= It is the flexible
element of the automotive exhaust system.

I'm in tere, I design;
= I'm
part of the team who designs them.

um sorry I don't have enough time kk I will continue tomorrow ..
=
Sorry I don't have enough time kk I will continue tomorrow.

Hi Cole,

This is already a good introduction for your company. You may continue with describing your roles and responsibilities.

Please take note of these points when writing:

 - Always capitalise the first letter of the first word in a sentence.
- Separate numbers or amount from the items being described.
 
There were just minor lapses on spacing, but I think your sentences and word choices are clear and concise. Keep this up. You're on your way to being a good writer.

Cheers,
Marie ^_^

(P. S. Looking forward to the continuation).

 

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