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  I think I would explain colors to a blind person by explaining the feeling. For the blind, they don't have experiences about see the colors, I would explain the emotion related to colors. For example, red is connected to the passion and yellow is related to the warmth. These emotions help them to understand the colors. Online learning cannot replace traditional in-person education. Do you agree or disagree? I totally agree with the statement that online learning cannot replace face-to-face education in some point. First of all, online learning reduces the performance of education. In the online environment, there is no interaction between teacher and students and it makes students lose their attention. Finally it lowers the academic performance. During the COVID-19, many students attended the online class through Zoom. After few years from pandemic, it turned out that students who took online class have lower average of academic performance and they lack of communication skills too. Moreover, education is not just teaching and learning but also interaction with others. Through debates, students get to know what they truly know and what they don't know. Also, communication with teachers is important in terms of their understanding. For instance, there was a research about the interaction during class and it found that debate and communication makes students understand better. For these reasons, in-person education outweighs the online learning.
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I think I would explain colors to a blind person by explaining the feeling. = I think I would explain colors to a blind person by describing the feelings they evoke.
 “explaining the feeling” → “describing the feelings they evoke” is more natural and clear.

For the blind, they don't have experiences about see the colors, I would explain the emotion related to colors.
 = Blind people do not have experience seeing colors, so I would explain the emotions associated with each color.
 “they don't have experiences about see the colors” → “do not have experience seeing colors”; “the emotion related to colors” → “emotions associated with each color.”

For example, red is connected to the passion and yellow is related to the warmth. = For example, red is associated with passion, and yellow is associated with warmth.
“connected to the passion” → “associated with passion”; “the warmth” → “warmth” (no article).

These emotions help them to understand the colors. = These emotions can help them understand colors.
“help them to understand” → “help them understand” is simpler and natural; “the colors” → “colors.”

ESSAY FEEDBACK:
Your essay presents a clear opinion that online learning cannot fully replace in-person education, and you provide relevant reasons to support your argument, which is good. The logic of your points is understandable, but the arrangement could be smoother: for example, you could first explain the issue with academic performance, then discuss communication and interaction, and finally provide examples or evidence. Some sentences need grammatical corrections and more precise word choices to improve accuracy and coherence, for instance, “they lack of communication skills” should be “they lack communication skills,” and “in some point” should be “to some extent.” Overall, your ideas are relevant and coherent but linking your points with transition words and refining sentence structure would make the essay stronger and easier to follow. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!


 

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