• The families link together and someday, they decided to cut down a family because it is too big to care about all people. = The families would link together, and someday they would decide to reduce a family because it is too big to care for all the people.
• In working area, people keep changing their jobs during life because they have lots of time. = In the working area, people keep changing their jobs during their life because they have lots of time.
• They keep challenging other things and changing their career as they want. = They keep trying new things and changing their careers as they want.
• But in some point, society would be full of people who never die. = But at some point, society would be full of people who never die.
• Then, the government decided to move older people to other planet or other place because they lack of space. = Then, the government would decide to move older people to another planet or place because there is a lack of space.
• In some point, they can make people die with drugs or medication for maintaining the society. = At some point, they could make people die with drugs or medication to maintain society.

ESSAY:
​It is more important to preserve traditional culture than to focus only on modernization. Firstly, if people don’t preserve ancient culture, it could be lost forever. No one would remember the past without making an effort. Also, people don’t need to fully embrace modernization because traditional culture is still present in everyday life, and they can easily experience it. For these reasons, I believe it is important to preserve traditional culture alongside modernization.

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