제 목   What would you do if you found $100 on the street?    상 태  
   작성자   kc7339    등록일   2025-09-26
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  If I found $100 on the street, I would make a reservation for a restaurant which is too expensive to go with my own money. My boyfriend and I enjoy having delicious food during a date. Still, we haven't tried a fine-dining restaurant because of its price. So if we get $100 on the street, we'd rather go to a beautiful restaurant. Should nuclear power be promoted as an eco-friendly energy source or banned due to safety risks? Nuclear power should be prohibited due to its safety risks for several reasons. Although many experts persist nuclear power development due to its efficiency, it has the possibility to harm many people suddenly. For instance, in Chernobyl, nobody can anticipate the explosion of nuclear power plant. It damages a number of people living there, and still, we can't reconstitute the region because of it radioactivity. Also, there are other alternative energy sources from nature such as water, wind, and sun. These kinds of energy sources are not as efficient as nuclear power but it's much safer. People living near the natural energy plant don't have to worry about the explosion. Because of danger of nuclear power and safety of other energy sources, I think nuclear power should be banned.
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  • If I found $100 on the street, I would make a reservation for a restaurant which is too expensive to go with my own money. = If I found $100 on the street, I would make a reservation at a restaurant that is usually too expensive for me to afford.

Use “at a restaurant,” not “for a restaurant.” “Too expensive to go with my own money” is awkward → “too expensive for me to afford.”

  • My boyfriend and I enjoy having delicious food during a date. = My boyfriend and I enjoy eating delicious food on our dates.

​More natural to say “on our dates” instead of “during a date.”

  • Still, we haven't tried a fine-dining restaurant because of its price. = However, we haven’t tried a fine-dining restaurant because of the price.

“Still” is okay, but “However” is smoother in academic/neutral writing.

  • So if we get $100 on the street, we'd rather go to a beautiful restaurant. = So if we found $100 on the street, we would go to a nice restaurant.

Keep verb tense consistent with the conditional (“found” / “would”). “We’d rather go” implies preference between options; simpler “we would go” is clearer.
 

​ESSAY CORRECTION:

Nuclear power should be prohibited due to its safety risks for several reasons. Although many experts support nuclear power development because of its efficiency, it still has the potential to harm many people suddenly. For instance, in Chernobyl, no one anticipated the explosion of the nuclear power plant. It harmed countless residents, and even today the region cannot be restored because of its radioactivity. In addition, there are alternative energy sources such as water, wind, and solar power. These sources may not be as efficient as nuclear power, but they are much safer. People living near renewable energy plants do not have to worry about explosions. Because of the dangers of nuclear power and the safety of renewable energy sources, I believe nuclear power should be banned.

Great job! Your essay is clear and convincing with strong examples. Just polish word choice and grammar for smoother flow. Keep it up!
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